I’ve looked over your script and I’ve gotta say – this is an amazing job you’ve done with the setting, but I think it would be better if you put it in a high school.
Having an original place for your story to unfold is nice and all, but there’s no way in Hell that I’m going to be invested in a show like that. It doesn’t have the same umph. Do you get what I’m saying? Like, uh, it would have that high school feel to it. Yeah, that’s it. I wouldn’t be interested in this anime because it’s not in a high school.
Trust me on this one, I don’t think you can get away with not having a high school in your anime these days unless you’re some renowned buff like Watanabe-san or something. I don’t remember what he does. He’s already lost me because my favorite seiyuus never appear in his anime.
See, for example, this script of yours has nothing for me to latch onto. The amount of interesting content in this script is negligible at best. Where’s my first day of school? What about the opening ceremony? I need someone walking uphill amidst a row of bleeding sakura trees, or perhaps a horde of enthusiastic students seeking hapless freshmen to drag into their dinghy, sweaty little clubs. I want a class representative to reassure me that my life choices are correct, and so that I can ignore everything they say anyway.
While you’re at it, plan a culture festival, too. And don’t make the class do something generic like a haunted house or a maid cafe. That would be sooooo predictable.
And isn’t using a high school a winning formula, anyway? Just splapp-me-do a high school into your script and it will be mainstream, for sure. As it is right now, I can’t accept this. I don’t feel safe in it. Where’s my plucky sidekick to feel superior to in comparison? Why can’t I join a club? Do I ever see my favorite girls in swimsuits? Do I have at least five possible love interests? C’mon, man, throw me a bone.
You can’t pull something like this stuff you have in your script and expect people to be comfortable. It’s too risky, I tell you. We don’t know how people will react to something that’s not the same stuff they’re used to seeing. They might retaliate. They might call us shit on Twitter and 2chan. They might accuse us of being 2deep4them. Our sales will drop. My family and friends might shun me because I approved an anime without another bloody high school. Why should we take that chance when we can just do as I suggest and put in that stupid high school already?
Don’t you get it? High school is life. Any anime fan should know that you can’t be very interesting unless you’ve been in one. That’s why they’re so popular, right? Because people think high school should be the most interesting part of any human being’s life, right? Right. So, if you want this little project of yours to succeed, you will do as I say.
Also, before I forget. Last Exile is such a dumb name for your script, so I changed it to Love Song of a Certain Pilot.
Perfect. That sounds a lot more forgettable now.